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Personal Statements For MBA
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Lauren Hammond
Lauren Hammond

Table of Contents

  1. MBA personal statement tips
  2. MBA School personal statement examples
  3. Learn more about Lauren, our PT personal statement expert.

MBA Personal Statements

Lauren Hammond is our MBA essay expert and has been helping people write their business school personal statements for several years. Whether you just want some feedback on a draft, or you're staring at a blank Word doc and don't know where to begin, she is happy to help!

Contact Lauren directly at 951-395-4646 (phone or text), or send us an email.

Meet Lauren Hammond

Lauren: I earned my Bachelor’s Degree in Literature and Writing, with a concentration in Writing, at California State University San Marcos (CSUSM) and my Master’s Degree in English and Comparative Literature at San Diego State University (SDSU). I recently completed my PhD in English at the University of California Riverside (UCR) in September 2023. Upon graduating, I began my current position as UCR's Graduate Writing Center Specialist and Fulbright Program Advisor last summer.

I have been a writing consultant for nearly 10 years now, and I've helped people with research writing, thesis/dissertation projects, rhetorical and literary analyses, writing in the humanities, grammar/sentence mechanics, and more. My focus for VKTP centers on graduate school application materials– including personal statements, diversity statements, and research statements– as well as job market materials for academic and alt-academic positions– resumes, CVs, cover letters, etc.

During my downtime, I love hanging out with my husband, 2-year-old daughter, and our two dogs, Link and Leia! My favorite activities are going on the boat, cruising on the golf cart, and making our way through all of the local eateries. When we aren’t out and about, I typically enjoy reading and watching movies.

Working with Lauren is $225 per hour or $995 for a package purchase of 5 hours. You can reach her at 951-395-4646 (phone or text), or by sending us an email.

Video: 7 Ways to Write a Crappy Graduate School Personal Statement

For more personal statement tips, check out Vince's video: 7 Ways to Write a Crappy Graduate School Personal Statement.

Frequently Asked Questions

We generally recommend about 4-8 weeks - 6 weeks is a good sweet spot. It takes time to come up with ideas and get those ideas onto paper in a compelling form. It also allows time for feedback from one or two trusted advisors.

Other than Google, I really like the sample admissions essays in Graduate Admissions Essays by Donald Asher. If you're a DIY kind of person, Asher's advice for the entire graduate admissions process is very good.

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MOST personal statements are BORING! Not because the person writing them is boring, but perhaps because:

  1. Their focus is too broad. They try to cover everything they've done, and nothing ends up standing out.
  2. They're impersonal. It's a personal statement - the reader needs to get a sense of who you are and what you're actually like - not some sanitized "professional" version of you.
  3. They're too safe. Ironically, a statement that takes no risks can be the riskiest thing you can do. We're not applying to a program with the intent of blending in with all the other applicants!

Granted, the above things can be overdone, or done wrong. But most statements make no impact, so it's worth thinking about how yours actually can.

Applying to a competitive MBA program is a bit like running a marathon – it requires a good deal of preparation, stamina, and strategy. Candidates need to start by figuring out why they want an MBA and which schools align with their career goals. This personal reflection helps shape their application and makes choosing the right program easier.

A big chunk of the prep involves tackling the GRE or GMAT. These tests measure things like math skills, verbal reasoning, and writing ability. Scoring well is key because it's one of the ways schools judge academic readiness. To nail these exams, candidates often hit the books hard, join prep courses, or get help from tutors.

But it's not all about test scores. MBA programs also want to see a solid academic record and some noteworthy professional experience. They're on the lookout for folks who've shown they can climb the career ladder, lead a team, or solve tricky problems at work.

Then there's the application itself, especially the essays and recommendation letters. Essays are a chance to tell a story – who you are, what you've overcome, and where you're headed. It's important to keep it real and speak from the heart. Picking the right people to vouch for you in recommendation letters is also crucial. These should be folks who really know you and can talk up your strengths.

Finally, if you make it to the interview stage, it's showtime. This is where personality and passion come into play. MBA programs want to see that you're not just smart and accomplished but also excited and a good fit for their culture.

Throughout this process, networking with alumni, attending events, and maybe even visiting campuses can give candidates an inside look and help them stand out. In a nutshell, getting into a top MBA program means showing off your smarts, sharing your story, and proving you're ready to join the ranks of future business leaders.

BTW, Lauren can also help with:

Love For Lauren

  • Hunter Austin

    "As someone who was unsure what exactly grad schools (specifically law schools) look for in personal statements, I could not recommend Lauren enough to guide you through, what can be, an overwhelming journey in constructing/organizing a personal statement. Lauren is professional, yet sincere and understanding. I had the pleasure of having her help me with my grad school personal statement, in which I never felt she was writing it for me, but rather using her vast experience in writing to consolidate lengthy sentences to be more fluid and concise. The result was a paper that I felt proud to submit, and was true to myself and my writing style. Lauren never hesitated to ask me if her edits still fit what I wanted to express, resulting in someone very easy to work with. Furthermore, she helped put the ideas and information I had into more clear language. It was a pleasure to have Lauren work with me on this process and I’m glad for others that work with Lauren in the future!"

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  • Fiona Wang

    "I had about 6 sessions with Lauren Hammond to go over my personal statements for PhD/PsyD Clinical Psychology applications. I had different goals for each of my statements (e.g., trim, content development, brainstorm ideas), and she tailored each session to meet my needs. An hour might seem short, but she was very productive and sometimes went over two short statements in one session. She was also available via text for any brief questions or concerns. I am very happy with her service and recommend it to anyone who wants to craft a stand-out personal statement. I thought my writing skills were already good, but the final product, including her revisions, turned out even better than I expected."

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  • Lily Annino

    Lauren helped me out SO much with my MFT graduate school essays. I've already gotten an interview from two schools, and I was incredibly happy with the essay results. 110% would recommend her! Thank you so much Lauren.

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  • Aster M

    "I worked with Lauren Hammond on my personal statement and she was amazing!! I spent a couple months working with her and it was one of the best decisions that I feel elevated my grad school applications. I came into the first meeting with a draft essay that was basically my resume and was all over the place. Lauren helped me nail down my story and what I am passionate about. I ended up writing an amazing personal statement with great feedback from Lauren that I felt really showed readers who I am. She was super flexible with the times we met and I ended up getting into my TOP choice schools (Johns Hopkins, Brown, etc). I would definitely work with her again!"

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  • Mira Park

    "Lauren Hammond was so incredibly helpful with my personal statements for grad school. I really needed help with organization, staying focused on a coherent narrative and content-building, which she was phenomenal with. She's also a really sweet person and a pleasure to work with! Can't recommend her enough."

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  • Renee Begin

    "Lauren Hammond was amazing. She provided me with thoughtful feedback that structured and strengthened my graduate school application essays. She was great at asking questions to push me to be a better writer. You can tell she genuinely cares about her students and wants to see you succeed. Additionally she is flexible in scheduling and will make deadlines work with your timeline. I was accepted into my top school choice and appreciate Lauren for her help in the process. If you or someone you know is looking for an essay tutor for graduate applications, Lauren is definitely the best!"

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  • Mikayla Haas

    "As I was applying to PhD programs, I was struggling to write my personal statements. I searched online for hours to try and find something or someone that looked worth spending the money on and I came across Lauren Hammond at Vince Kotchian Test Prep. I was only planning on doing maybe one session to help get me started but Lauren was SO good that I continued working with her for weeks. She gave such valuable feedback and felt like she truly cared about making my work the best it can be. I even recommended her to my other colleagues who were applying to grad school and they felt the same way. I currently have 3 interviews for grad school and I couldn't have gotten those without her help!"

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  • Clifford Grant

    "Very happy to have worked with Vince on my GRE prep and Lauren on my personal essay writing. Both were integral to my success in getting accepted to my ideal grad school. Vince had a very straightforward and understandable approach toward taking the test which helped remove the test anxiety I definitely would have otherwise felt. I knew exactly what was coming weeks before I sat down to take it and managed to score about 10-15 points higher than I would have without his help. Lauren was equally helpful in editing my essay - both on the finer details as well as big picture ideas and concepts. I wholeheartedly believe their assistance throughout the GRE and grad school application process is what pushed me over the edge and got me accepted into my ideal program at my ideal school. 5 stars, no question."

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  • Nicolina Patin

    "I had the pleasure of working with Lauren Hammond on my Master of Public Health statement of purpose essays, and I’m thrilled to share that I was accepted into all my MPH programs! While I had started my essays, I found Lauren’s guidance on restructuring my writing to be incredibly valuable and provided a strong foundation that I applied across all my applications. Her in-line edits helped refine my language, ensuring clarity and conciseness—especially for essays with strict word limits. I also appreciated her flexibility in how we used our time, making each session highly productive. I highly recommend working with Lauren!"

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  • Simran Bhullar

    Lauren Hammond is incredible at helping you frame your experiences in a way that makes a lasting impact. She expertly curated my statements of purpose for MPH programs, ensuring they were not only tailored to each school but also powerfully compelling. Lauren goes above and beyond to support her students, and her dedication truly shines. After working with Lauren, I had public health graduates and experts review my letters; they were deeply impressed—'reads beautifully, with such clarity and impact that I wouldn’t change a thing.' I highly recommend working with her! 

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  • Emily Gayton

    If you are looking for help with your personal statement, you need to see Lauren Hammond! Lauren helped me with my personal statement while applying to graduate school for Occupational Therapy. She was extremely helpful, supportive, and knowledgeable! I worked with her over zoom and cannot express enough how helpful she was! I highly recommend her!