MPH Personal Statements Online Advising

 

The Master's of Public Health personal statement can seem like the most daunting and difficult part of your application.

Silver lining, though: a well-written essay can:

  1. Wake up a bored admissions committee (most essays they'll read are extremely similar)
  2. Convey your real personality and make you come alive to your readers
  3. Depict your experiences in movie-like clarity and detail
  4. Show your best qualities and values
  5. Help the reader see why you and their program are such a great fit

Simply put, the essay is not a to-do; it's a powerful tool to help you get accepted!

Lauren Hammond is our MPH application essay expert and has been helping people write their Master of Public Health personal statements for several years. Whether you just want some feedback on a draft, or you're staring at a blank Word doc and don't know where to begin, she is happy to help!

 

Contact Lauren directly at 951-395-4646 (phone or text), or send us an email.

 

She works with people online via Zoom and via email / Google Docs. P.S. We also offer GRE prep!

 

TABLE OF CONTENTS

 

1. MPH personal statement tips

2. MPH personal statement examples

3. Learn more about Lauren, our MPH personal statement expert.

 

MPH Personal Statement Tips

Here are a few basic tips to help your write your statement.

 

1. Explain Your Interest in Public Health

  • Share a specific experience or observation: Highlight a moment or situation that drew your attention to public health, such as working in a healthcare setting, observing health disparities, or learning about the broader social determinants of health.
  • Focus on the bigger picture: Explain how your curiosity about improving community well-being or addressing systemic health challenges motivated you to pursue an MPH.
  • Show your commitment to impact: Clearly articulate your desire to contribute to advancing health equity, improving outcomes, or implementing effective health policies.

Example:
"While volunteering at a community health clinic, I observed the barriers patients faced in accessing preventive care, from language differences to financial insecurity. This experience opened my eyes to the systemic challenges in healthcare delivery and motivated me to seek solutions that address these inequities at a population level."

2. Highlight Relevant Experiences and Skills

  • Discuss academic and professional preparation: Share your background in fields like biology, sociology, or public health, as well as internships, research, or work experiences that have prepared you for graduate-level training.
  • Demonstrate transferable skills: Highlight analytical, communication, leadership, or organizational skills you’ve developed through previous roles, and explain how they’ll contribute to your success in an MPH program.
  • Show awareness of public health’s scope: Reflect on what you’ve learned from experiences working in or observing healthcare systems, research, or public health interventions.

Example:
"As a research assistant on a project studying the impact of environmental factors on childhood asthma rates, I developed skills in data analysis and community engagement. This role deepened my understanding of how environmental health intersects with social determinants, strengthening my interest in pursuing a career focused on public health policy."

3. Align Your Goals with the Program’s Strengths

  • Research the program: Highlight specific features such as faculty expertise, areas of concentration (e.g., epidemiology, health policy, global health), or unique opportunities like internships or community partnerships.
  • Connect your goals to the program: Explain how the program’s resources and curriculum will support your aspirations, whether in research, policy, program implementation, or global health.
  • Demonstrate your long-term vision: Articulate your career goals and the role an MPH will play in helping you achieve them, such as improving healthcare access, designing interventions, or addressing global health crises.

Example:
"I am excited about [Program Name]’s focus on community-based interventions and its strong ties to local health departments. These resources align with my goal of designing and implementing health education programs that empower underserved populations to take charge of their health outcomes."

 

MPH Personal Statement Examples

Here's an example of a strong MPH personal statement. Below the statement, we'll explain what we liked about it.

 

When I was in high school, I volunteered at a local community health fair, translating for Spanish-speaking families as they navigated booths on nutrition, diabetes prevention, and mental health resources. I was struck by how much of a difference access to information and care could make in people’s lives. One mother told me she had never before been able to ask a doctor questions in her own language. That moment stayed with me and planted the seed for my interest in public health.

In college, I majored in public health with a concentration in health promotion and education. My coursework gave me a strong foundation in epidemiology, biostatistics, and program planning. One of my most formative experiences was a group project where we developed a hypothetical campaign to reduce childhood obesity in underserved communities. I learned the importance of tailoring interventions to cultural and socioeconomic contexts, as well as the value of community partnerships in promoting health equity.

After graduation, I worked as a health educator for a nonprofit focused on improving access to care in rural areas. My role involved designing and delivering workshops on topics like chronic disease management and maternal health. One of the most rewarding aspects of the job was working directly with community members to identify their unique needs and barriers. For instance, I collaborated with local leaders to create a series of workshops on hypertension that accounted for language preferences, work schedules, and transportation challenges. Seeing attendance grow and participants implement changes in their daily lives was incredibly fulfilling.

Volunteering with a harm reduction organization further deepened my understanding of public health. I worked on outreach initiatives for individuals experiencing homelessness, distributing supplies and connecting them to healthcare services. This experience reinforced my belief in meeting people where they are and addressing the social determinants of health that underpin so many disparities.

Pursuing a Master of Public Health (MPH) is the next step in my journey. I am particularly drawn to [University Name] because of its emphasis on community-based research and interdisciplinary collaboration. The program’s focus on health equity and policy development aligns perfectly with my goal of addressing systemic barriers to care.

In the future, I hope to work at the intersection of community health and policy, designing programs that improve access to care for marginalized populations. I’m especially interested in maternal and child health, as I’ve seen how crucial early interventions can be in shaping long-term outcomes. Eventually, I aspire to contribute to large-scale policy initiatives that promote health equity and ensure that no one is left behind.

Looking back, that first experience at the health fair was just the beginning of my passion for public health. Since then, every step—from academic studies to professional and volunteer experiences—has solidified my commitment to this field. I’m excited to bring my dedication, empathy, and problem-solving skills to your program and to continue growing as a public health professional dedicated to making a meaningful impact.

 

What we liked about this statement:

 

  • Personal Connection: The opening anecdote about the health fair immediately connects the applicant's motivation to a real-life experience, making it relatable and engaging.

  • Academic Preparation: The applicant highlights relevant coursework and a meaningful project, showcasing their understanding of core public health concepts and practical applications.

  • Professional and Volunteer Experience: The essay demonstrates the applicant’s hands-on experience in health education and harm reduction, emphasizing their commitment to addressing health disparities.

  • Focus on Program Fit: By linking their interests to the program's strengths (e.g., community-based research and health equity), the applicant shows they've done their homework and are a good match for the program.

  • Clear Goals: The essay outlines specific career aspirations, such as improving access to care and working in maternal and child health, giving the admissions committee confidence in the applicant's focus.

  • Cohesive Narrative: The closing ties back to the opening anecdote, creating a narrative arc that reinforces the applicant’s passion and commitment.

 

Lauren Hammond

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Lauren: I earned my Bachelor’s Degree in Literature and Writing, with a concentration in Writing, at California State University San Marcos (CSUSM) and my Master’s Degree in English and Comparative Literature at San Diego State University (SDSU). I recently completed my PhD in English at the University of California Riverside (UCR) in September 2023. Upon graduating, I began my current position as UCR's Graduate Writing Center Specialist and Fulbright Program Advisor last summer. 

I have been a writing consultant for nearly 10 years now, and I've helped people with research writing, thesis/dissertation projects, rhetorical and literary analyses, writing in the humanities, grammar/sentence mechanics, and more. My focus for VKTP centers on graduate school application materials– including personal statements, diversity statements, and research statements– as well as job market materials for academic and alt-academic positions– resumes, CVs, cover letters, etc. 

During my downtime, I love hanging out with my husband, 2-year-old daughter, and our two dogs, Link and Leia! My favorite activities are going on the boat, cruising on the golf cart, and making our way through all of the local eateries. When we aren’t out and about, I typically enjoy reading and watching movies.

Working with Lauren is $225 per hour or $995 for a package purchase of 5 hours. You can reach her at 951-395-4646 (phone or text), or by sending us an email.

 

Love For Lauren

 

"I had about 6 sessions with Lauren Hammond to go over my personal statements for PhD/PsyD Clinical Psychology applications. I had different goals for each of my statements (e.g., trim, content development, brainstorm ideas), and she tailored each session to meet my needs. An hour might seem short, but she was very productive and sometimes went over two short statements in one session. She was also available via text for any brief questions or concerns. I am very happy with her service and recommend it to anyone who wants to craft a stand-out personal statement. I thought my writing skills were already good, but the final product, including her revisions, turned out even better than I expected."

- Fiona Wang (see review on Google Maps)

 

Lily Annino

Lauren helped me out SO much with my MFT graduate school essays. I've already gotten an interview from two schools, and I was incredibly happy with the essay results. 110% would recommend her! Thank you so much Lauren.

 

"Very happy to have worked with Vince on my GRE prep and Lauren on my personal essay writing. Both were integral to my success in getting accepted to my ideal grad school. Vince had a very straightforward and understandable approach toward taking the test which helped remove the test anxiety I definitely would have otherwise felt. I knew exactly what was coming weeks before I sat down to take it and managed to score about 10-15 points higher than I would have without his help. Lauren was equally helpful in editing my essay - both on the finer details as well as big picture ideas and concepts. I wholeheartedly believe their assistance throughout the GRE and grad school application process is what pushed me over the edge and got me accepted into my ideal program at my ideal school. 5 stars, no question."

- Clifford Grant (see review on Google Maps)

 

"I worked with Lauren Hammond on my personal statement and she was amazing!! I spent a couple months working with her and it was one of the best decisions that I feel elevated my grad school applications. I came into the first meeting with a draft essay that was basically my resume and was all over the place. Lauren helped me nail down my story and what I am passionate about. I ended up writing an amazing personal statement with great feedback from Lauren that I felt really showed readers who I am. She was super flexible with the times we met and I ended up getting into my TOP choice schools (Johns Hopkins, Brown, etc). I would definitely work with her again!"

- Aster M. (see review on Google Maps)

 

"Lauren Hammond was so incredibly helpful with my personal statements for grad school. I really needed help with organization, staying focused on a coherent narrative and content-building, which she was phenomenal with. She's also a really sweet person and a pleasure to work with! Can't recommend her enough."

- Mira Park (see review on Google Maps)

 

"As I was applying to PhD programs, I was struggling to write my personal statements. I searched online for hours to try and find something or someone that looked worth spending the money on and I came across Lauren Hammond at Vince Kotchian Test Prep. I was only planning on doing maybe one session to help get me started but Lauren was SO good that I continued working with her for weeks. She gave such valuable feedback and felt like she truly cared about making my work the best it can be. I even recommended her to my other colleagues who were applying to grad school and they felt the same way. I currently have 3 interviews for grad school and I couldn't have gotten those without her help!"

- Mikayla Haas (see review on Google Maps)

 

"Lauren Hammond was amazing. She provided me with thoughtful feedback that structured and strengthened my graduate school application essays. She was great at asking questions to push me to be a better writer. You can tell she genuinely cares about her students and wants to see you succeed. Additionally she is flexible in scheduling and will make deadlines work with your timeline. I was accepted into my top school choice and appreciate Lauren for her help in the process. If you or someone you know is looking for an essay tutor for graduate applications, Lauren is definitely the best!"

- Renee Begin (see review on Google Maps)

 

Frequently Asked Questions

 

How long should I spend writing my MPH personal statement?

We generally recommend about 4-8 weeks - 6 weeks is a good sweet spot. It takes time to come up with ideas and get those ideas onto paper in a compelling form.

 

Where can I find some good examples of personal statements?

Other than Google, I really like the sample admissions essays in Graduate Admissions Essays by Donald Asher. If you're a DIY kind of person, Asher's advice for the entire graduate admissions process is very good.

Note: The above links are Amazon affiliate links and I earn a commission if you purchase things through them. However, any commission I earn comes at no additional cost to you, and you pay nothing extra. My recommendation is based on extensive experience using this book's advice with dozens of people over the years, and I recommend it because it's helpful and useful, not because of the small commission I receive if you choose to buy it.

 

How can I make my personal statement stand out?

MOST personal statements are BORING! Not because the person writing them is boring, but perhaps because:

  1. Their focus is too broad. They try to cover everything they've done, and nothing ends up standing out.
  2. They're impersonal. It's a personal statement - the reader needs to get a sense of who you are and what you're actually like - not some sanitized "professional" version of you.
  3. They're too safe. Ironically, a statement that takes no risks can be the riskiest thing you can do. We're not applying to a program with the intent of blending in with all the other applicants!

Granted, the above things can be overdone, or done wrong. But most statements make no impact, so it's worth thinking about how yours actually can.

For more personal statement tips, check out Vince's video: 7 Ways to Write a Crappy Graduate School Personal Statement.

What are the basics of applying to MPH programs?

Gaining admission into a Master of Public Health (MPH) program is like preparing for a multifaceted mission — it requires a blend of academic strength, practical experience, and a dedicated interest in public health issues. Here’s how candidates typically gear up for this journey:

The educational foundation often begins with a bachelor's degree. While the field of study can vary, courses in biology, sociology, statistics, and environmental science are beneficial. These courses provide a broad understanding of the factors that influence public health. Good grades in these subjects are important as they demonstrate academic capability, but MPH programs look at more than just grades.

Practical experience in public health or a related field is highly valued. This can come from volunteering, internships, or work in healthcare, community outreach, or research. These experiences are essential as they show a commitment to public health issues and provide a practical understanding of the challenges and complexities in the field.

Many MPH programs require the GRE. A good score can strengthen an application, but it’s the combination of academic performance and real-world experience that really counts.

Applications usually include essays and letters of recommendation. Essays are a chance to articulate your passion for public health, discuss your experiences, and outline your career goals in the field. Recommendation letters should ideally come from individuals who can attest to your abilities and potential in public health.

Interviews, if part of the application process, allow you to demonstrate your communication skills, your understanding of public health issues, and your commitment to the field.

Extra efforts, such as participating in public health-related research projects, attending relevant workshops, and being involved in public health initiatives, can also give your application an edge.

In summary, getting into an MPH program involves a mix of strong academic background, practical experience in public health or related fields, a clear understanding and commitment to public health issues, and the personal qualities essential for addressing the diverse challenges in the field of public health. It’s a path for those who are passionate about improving health outcomes and addressing health disparities at the community or global level.